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it rains hard enough

that i can finally sit quietly,
as if lighting candles.

maybe there is
nowhere else to be.

a cup of water trembles
on the table as if afraid,

kept too long
from the useful yearning of roots,
from the anonymous way rain falls.

i light one candle
then another,
quietly,
as if lighting candles.

the rain keeps pressing damp invisible flowers
against the window,
reminding me how long the near-dark lasts,

how the woods at the edge of the yard
never see,
but thirst enough to catch fire.

each candle moves like the rain,
each quieting life
from lives of their own.

in the half-light coming in,
i can pretend it's morning.

i can sit back,
pool on the chair like water,
somehow assured--

the rain will take all night,
beginning.

outside, the trees seem to look around
through the rain,

swaying
as if trying to see around each other.

their lives are as quiet and long
as the beginning of a rain.

this is the way life is,
filling with other lives:

just feeling water
enter the ground,

nowhere
else to be.
.
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Given 2011-12-03
nowhere else by ~antonfrost ( Featured by wreckling )
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i-am-a-bridgewalker Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
the way this piece picks up intensity is fabulously constructed.
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antonfrost Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011   Writer
mm, the way the rain falls, then FALLS, then it's just sound in the dark.

...i don't like just saying "thank you." haha
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i-am-a-bridgewalker Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
in the dark, all sound is magic.
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antonfrost Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011   Writer
magic is changes made.
half-dark and half-sound.
a whole moon invisible above the rain.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011
Another DD?! I've been away for such a while.
Congrats!! :heart:
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antonfrost Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011   Writer
haha thank you!
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Angie-Pictures Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2011
Congratulations on the DD! :iconflowerheartplz:
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antonfrost Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2011   Writer
Thank you :heart:
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Angie-Pictures Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2011
My pleasure! :hug:
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InkDream46 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2011
A beautiful, relaxing poem. I love this. Reflective too, one of my favorite poetry traits.
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nekooYuui-cHan Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
i love this :heart:

dunno why.. but I can imagine a little girl, sitting in a dark and cold corner of a room, telling the poem. I just.... love this! :3
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XionKingdom Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I love rain and any poetry about rain.
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Hika-bunny Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011  Hobbyist
love it... ♥ ♥ ♥
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lauren2313 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011
:) I'm happy after reading this. :)
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WhispersOfHope12 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011  Student Writer
*sits there in awe, too speechless to -well- speak*
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link] :)
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LadyScipio Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful.... Thank you.
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OliveArtOlive Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I don't normally like poems, but this is captivating. :love:
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skyggedal Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Love it. Definitely a worthy DD.
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kersee9 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011  Professional Writer
:clap:
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antonfrost Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011   Writer
:wave:
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kersee9 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011  Professional Writer
hiya! very impressive piece, a well-deserved DD! :D
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antonfrost Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011   Writer
thank you! :heart:
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BACHT Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011  Professional General Artist
a great modest poet... I feel the humble in it... :)
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antonfrost Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011   Writer
:heart:
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Vigilo Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011  Student Writer
congratulations on your DD! :heart:
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antonfrost Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011   Writer
thank you :)
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RestlessSands Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011
good god. this is so quiet and echoing.

really really absolutely lovely

:heart:
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antonfrost Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011   Writer
i'm glad you like this. :heart:
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meghan-solo Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2011
i think you would have enjoyed the past few days here,
waking up to a clap of thunder
and then getting lullabyed back to sleep
by the rain

also,
the rain pressing damp invisible flowers against the window,
sometimes i think it looks like that too
and i only just realised that that's what i think of

:heart: faved
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antonfrost Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2011   Writer
i love the way storms toss around and deepen the night, pulling you in and out of sleep, the way a smooth rock skips in and out of water when thrown perfectly.

good! that makes me feel that this is really a poem...saying something that someone might have been meaning all along. :heart:
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meghan-solo Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2011
all of your poems are really poems
:heart:
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antonfrost Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2011   Writer
:heart:
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