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on the roof
simpering with
the pigeons
i throw
sheen after sheen
from buckets of paint;
you do all
the work
getting
in the
way.

awnings
spattered
like lips
with the color
of kisses
shiver
and move.

and listen
to this:

the birds
open their mouths
in the rain

spread one wing
then another
and lean out
and over--

the river
opens
onto salt

as the moon
blooms
like a coin
in a fist;

lovers
part lips

while
friends
part ways.

the bartender
peels a lime;

the doorman
pulls at the door

while the waitress
clears the table.

i open
a window,

you open
your eyes:

work
is making space.

here and
i have
made
room
for you.
:iconantonfrost:
work is making space (i was watching snowplows when i realized this)
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Given 2012-07-16
Dear Reader by ~antonfrost Suggester Writes: The words in this poem carry a distinct duality in them; work and relationships. The vivid descriptions and metaphors are only made more powerful by the poem's closing lines. ( Suggested by ^NicSwaner and Featured by ^Beccalicious )
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`KathrynODriscoll Mar 5, 2013  Student Writer
Hey there, for #projecteducate this week we are exploring poetry forms. Myself, `thetaoofchaos and =AzizrianDaoXrak discussed Free Verse poetry here and featured this deviation. Just thought I'd let you know! Thanks.
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^NicSwaner Aug 1, 2012  Student Writer
How did I miss this receiving a DD? I suggested it and thought it was never going to be featured and it turns out I somehow missed it. So here's to it, cheers, with a cup of :tea: I stand by what I said, the poem is astounding, and the line break in "work / is making space" that makes the reader pause gets me every time.
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*antonfrost Aug 1, 2012   Writer
i'm glad you still like it. :heart:
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Mood: Love =CrematedMan Jul 19, 2012  Student Writer
"lovers part lips while friends part ways". Great line.
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=dark-harou Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful, very vivid. Congratulations on the much deserved Daily Deviation!
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:iconantonfrost:
thank you!
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=dark-harou Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are quite welcome :)
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~Mae-Fliy Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist
I love how vivid this is. I saw the image of the birds particularly clearly :) Beautiful :D
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:iconantonfrost:
glad it gave you something. :heart:
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~Seraph5 Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wow this is incredibly beautiful. i love the vast amounts of imagery that appear from these beautiful simple words.
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